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[Фрида]

Angelic city.

Angelic city on far sky
And many angels live in town
These angels ever do not cry
And angels never are cast down

There downy clouds cover land
The sun lights every quiet corner
The river's like blue endless band
Because the Town hasn't border

The beach is covered with gold sand
The peace and quiet in the city
And angels always give a hand
And angels always can show pity

The angel's wings are white and bright
The angel's eyes are clean and clear
And their faces are very light
And their glances are not blear

In seventh heaven castle stands
The Queen sits in the massive throne
She's very ill. She very pants.
But every angel falls prone.

And Kindness is the name of Queen
And she does never any evil
She's perfect clean, without a sin
And she is genial and civil

The Queen is dressed in the white gown
Her brilliant diadem from gold
And Kindness rules Angelic Town
And Kindness rules the human world

But now the Queen starves with cold
The cold is at the streets of city
This cold came from the human world
Angelic Town deserves the pity

Can it be true, that Queen gets dead
And angels crying by salt waters
They don't believe, that their head
Gets dead. And angel's city totters.

And heaven gets dismal and dark
Despond and sorrow in the city
Angelic voices are like a bark
Already they cannot show pity.

Their wings became so black and blind
Their faces became dreadful and bitchy
And they forget when they were kind
Because their souls adust and pitchy.

These angels are like human race
And only Kindness can save mortals
And if we are live with good grace
We shall come in Angelic portals.

P.S. Буду благодарна за любые замечания, особенно за правку грамматики и пр., т.к. изучение аглицкого забросила, хотя стихотворение писалось давно, когда я его ещё изучала в универе.

[Fallen Angel]

На счет грамматики ничего сказать не могу, так как сама с ней не особо дружу. А вот содержание очень понравилось! Красиво написано.

[Фрида]

Fallen Angel, спасибочки !

[Mary De Mart]

Фрида, мне понравилось превращение "добра с белыми крвльями " в тех кто с "темными", единственное иногда ритм сбивается , но все-таки это именно иноязчная вещь , совершенно с другими особенностями......Здорово!

[Фрида]

Mary, спасибо, я очень ценю Ваше мнение.

[катрин]

Фрида, здорово!

[Мириам]

Мне очень понравилось

[Фрида]

Катрин, Мириам, пасибочки большое !